Jasmine Hart

Ditto :)

That would be great, thanks, I think it would help to integrate her. Just a warning, though, Ket is very difficult, so she mightn't be very grateful...just so you know ...

Apologies if I mess this up, not really sure what I'm going to do here... Keturah The commotion was ticking me off. It was the first time in I couldn't ...

Lol. Another good point.I'm so sorry for my lack of posts everywhere! I'm just being really flighty at the moment. I can't concentrate on anything for more than ten seconds! ...

I liked this, but, like Claudette, I'd suggest using punctuation. And now, for the part where I make absolutely no sense, but try really, really hard to, and hope that ...

You're right about it not being finished, but I did enjoy this. "Repait" was a typo. (Just to tell ya!Sometimes, they seem to slip past...) I think you could be ...

I liked the first stanza, though a comma or two wouldn't go amiss. It flowed well and had good rhythm. I liked the alliteration of the first line, and I ...

The pace and flow of this were nice. It might be interesting to write this from a few different angles, playing around with imagery and the likes. I'm not sure ...

reminded me of smoke rising up from a fire. Is it just me, or is this really mesmerizing? That's my completely inexpert opinion. :)

Lol. Different strokes for different folks, and all that jazz.

I like the rhyming couplets and would suggest maintaining them throughout. If you don't agree, I'd suggest that you say "go for a walk" instead of "on", for no reason ...

I like it, but I'd use punctuation. I know there's an article on it around here somewhere, but I can't for the life of me remember where... "My useless words ...

Your subject matter was interesting, but the rhyme here didn't do anything for me, as it seemed forced and I really don't think it added to your poem. Maybe try ...

I think that your tone was somewhat confused here. Until you said "We fly and do not hop", the tone was serious (for want of a better word), and then ...

Lol. You make a good point... Brigid I had been gazing out on the blank horizon for little more than ten minutes when Siofra came banging out of Anchorless' cabin. ...